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Now a days we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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These days,
producing
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the amount of
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 trash
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amount is
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has
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 increased rapidly across the globe as compared to the past period. There are several
reasons
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 behind
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growing
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the growth
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 in
population
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 and industries. The government and
population
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 should together to diminish the
amount
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 of debris produced.
This
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following
reasons
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.
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 with, there are some
reasons
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of
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for
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 producing a large
amount
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 of rubbish. One of the major causes is
that
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apply
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increasing the
population
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 across the world
while
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 the same
amount
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 of
trashes
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trash
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 will be produced.
This
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because
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is because
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, everyday individuals use a plethora of plastic and
rubbers
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rubber
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 stuffs, thereby,
massive
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a massive
the massive
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amount
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 of garbage is produced by the
population
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. Another reason is
that
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apply
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increasing the
manufacturing
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number of manufacturing
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 enterprises.
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 means,
production
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 companies can satisfy the
population
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's needs and
wants
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by
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through
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 massive
amountbof
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amount of
amounts of
production
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while
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 plenty of plastics and rubbers are used and dumbed into
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the bin
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bin
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bins
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. These are the major
reasons
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 for people producing more
trades
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trade
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. There are some remedies that can
be reduced
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reduce
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this
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 adverse phenomenon. One of the major solutions is that the authorities should increase the
recycle
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recycling
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production
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 plant in order
to
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for
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 these
garbages
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garbage
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will
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to be
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modify
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modified
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 into a new thing.
For instance
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, food cover plastic will
alter
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be altered
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 into a new food cover by recycling, and
as a result
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,
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production
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the production
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amount
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 might be reduced. Another remedy is that folks should not buy new things frequently even old stuff has good condition in order to they can reduce the rubbish
amount
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 enormously.
To conclude
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, the garbage
amount
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 is
raisen
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rising
 across the globe
due to
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growing
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the growing
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in
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apply
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population
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 and manufacturing units which
produces
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produce
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 plenty of goods.
However
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, increasing the
recycle
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recycling
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plant
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plants
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 and reducing
buy
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the buying of
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 new products are the solutions to
reece
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reduce
 the
amount
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 of rubbish produced.

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Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and a supporting example. Develop your arguments more thoroughly to provide an in-depth analysis. Use topic sentences effectively to introduce your paragraphs and demonstrate a clear progression of ideas throughout your essay.
coherence cohesion
Work on the organization of ideas within your paragraphs and across the essay to ensure a logical flow. Use appropriate conjunctions and cohesive devices to connect ideas and paragraphs more smoothly. Seek to avoid repetition and aim to vary your language with synonyms and paraphrasing.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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