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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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advent
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 of high-tech devices, there is an increasing number of
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 of searching
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news
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for news
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 on the
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.
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, some
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 believe that
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 will still receive the main priority from
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 readers. From my perspective,
people
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 will tend to get
news
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 and
information
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instead
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newspaper
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.
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, using
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 can bring some advantages for
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readers
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certain
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 level. In terms of optical health, reading
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newspaper
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 can help you
avoiding
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 suffering
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 eye strain
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 blue rays given off
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 smart device screens.
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, the images attached to the
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 in the
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 are larger.
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 can help the elderly read
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 easily.
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,
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advanced technology
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availability
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 of the
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 may bring some benefits for using online
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 searching.
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, wherever
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 are , they can access
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the
Internet
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 and find a wide range of
news
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 and
information
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 from all over the world.
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, if you are in
Viet Nam
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 in 2023, you can still find
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 from
American
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America
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 in 2013
by
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 a click.
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, with
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 of the
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, you can update continuously the
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 second by second with effortlessness.
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, if there is an accident
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 the road you are about to come across, you can avoid it by reading upgraded
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. In conclusion,
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newspaper
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a newspaper
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 may still maintain their popularity in certain
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 with the elderly and bring some benefits for optical health.
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, It is undisputed that, in the future, with
advent
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 of advanced technology and the
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,
people
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can be
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 not
to
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sweat for searching
news
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 and they can mainly read
news
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 on the
Internet
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. You should spend about 40 minutes on
this
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 task. Write about the following topic:
Although
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 more and more
people
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 read the
news
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 on the
Internet
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,
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newspapers
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newspaper
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 will remain the most important source of
news
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 for the majority of
people
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. Do you agree or disagree with that statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is clear logical progression of ideas throughout your essay. Ideas should be presented in a structured paragraph format, contributing to a cohesive argument.
coherence cohesion
Include an introductory paragraph that clearly states your opinion or thesis, and a conclusion that summarizes your main points and reaffirms your position.
task achievement
Provide concrete examples to support your main points. Whenever possible, include relevant, specific details to illustrate the arguments you are making.
task achievement
Task achievement: Although the response addressed the prompt, it requires a clearer position throughout the essay and stronger emphasis on answering all parts of the question.
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Consider a more balanced view by addressing potential counterarguments and providing comparisons to the traditional newspaper consumption where relevant.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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