Many people believe that the government should provide free education for all children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Education
is essential for anyone to succeed in their life.Many parents believe that
education
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free of cost which will help every child to complete their schooling. I completely agree
on
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this
statement and will explain why it is important in detail below.
Firstly
, Students who
got
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educated will be helpful to
the
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society and to the
goverment
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government
in the future. If
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goverment
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government
helps children
education
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free later that will make their society in better shape and
also
educated graduates will bring so many inventions and
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run
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successful
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business
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.
Secondly
, it improves the
country
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economic situation since people can able to create their own jobs and their inventions will be
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asset
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for them.
Finally
, more graduates can help the country to be well developed.
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,
goverment
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government
gets benefits in
later
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stage by providing free
education
there will
be
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definetly
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difficulties
to provide
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education
completely free for everyone. To
achive
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achieve
this
initially
it can try providing free for
atleast
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at least
5th grade and with a minimum free until higher
education
for some years and later once the country is developing they can slowly make
this
education
completely free. In Conclusion, making
childern
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children
education
free will always
be benefits
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to
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the
goverment
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government
in
later
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stage which not only makes
the
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society better, it
also
help
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for
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the
county
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country
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developement
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development
in future.
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