Many people believe that the government should provide free education for all children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Education

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is essential for anyone to succeed in their life.Many parents believe that

education

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should be provided

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free of cost which will help every child to complete their schooling. I completely agree

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this

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statement and will explain why it is important in detail below.

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, Students who

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educated will be helpful to

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society and to the

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goverment

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government

in the future. If

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

helps children

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education

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to education

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free later that will make their society in better shape and

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educated graduates will bring so many inventions and

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run

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successful

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business

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, it improves the

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economic situation since people can able to create their own jobs and their inventions will be

a value

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asset

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for them.

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, more graduates can help the country to be well developed.

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Even

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goverment

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government

gets benefits in

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stage by providing free

education

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there will

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definitely be

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definetly

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difficulties

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in providing

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education

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completely free for everyone. To

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achieve

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initially

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it can try providing free for

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at least

5th grade and with a minimum free until higher

education

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for some years and later once the country is developing they can slowly make

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education

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completely free. In Conclusion, making

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children

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free will always

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the

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government

later

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stage which not only makes

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society better, it

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help

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for

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the

county

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developement

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development

in future.

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coherence cohesion

The essay's structure is somewhat evident but lacks clear and logical progression of ideas. Paragraphs need clearer topic sentences and better linkage. Transitions between ideas should be smoother, with a better mix of cohesive devices.

task achievement

The response to the task is relatively generic. You should develop arguments with more specific examples and details. The introduction should clearly state your stance and the conclusion should effectively summarise the key points. Aim for a more thorough exploration of both sides of the argument for greater balance and depth.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

224 words

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