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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
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The line chart illustrates the data of
inquiries
 received by the travel agent office in
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particularly
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 city over a half-year
period
 in 2011.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the number of
inquiries
 received in
person
 and by telephone
were
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rise
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rose
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 significantly,
while
inquiries
 by
letter
 or
email
 declined sharply during the
period
. Looking for more details, the
advice
 of
inquiries
 received by telephone and in
person
 rose significantly in one city over a six-month
period
 in 2011.
Moreover
, at 400
advice
 in
person
 at the
began
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 in January and
then
 up to over 1800
advice
 in
person
 in June.
Likewise
, the data of
inquiries
 received by telephone increased significantly
at
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 around 800 calls to 1600 calls by the same token. Regarding
to
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the information by
letter
 or
email
 of
inquiries
 received was went down sharply between January to June in
particularly
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particular
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city
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cities
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 in 2011.
Furthermore
, at around 700
advice
 by
letter
 or
email
 in January and
then
 went down sharply to around 300 information by
letter
 or
email
 during the
period
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words inquiries, period, person, letter, email, advice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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