You want to hold a surprise party for a friend who is visiting his home town after a long time from a foreign country. Write a letter to a common friend asking for his help in organizing the party and in your letter: Write the reasons for organizing the party Describe when, where and how you would be organizing the party Ask your friend to meet you in person for further discussions

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Hello Dilay, How is going on? I hope

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letter finds you well. I have a great

suprise

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surprise

for you! Did you hear that? Our

ex roommate

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,Emre is visiting London

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weekend. We have

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seen each other for 3 years!

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I have an idea. As you know tomorrow is Emre's birthday and I decided to organize a

suprise

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birthday party on Saturday. That's why I need your help. I

tought

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that, we

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organize the birthday party at Mc Laren's bar.

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you remember? We were escaping from the school and going to drink beer at Mc Laren's bar. Ten years

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the

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time

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memories, I think that

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bar is the perfect match! I will invite our close friends from

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and Emre's girlfriend Ayşe. It'll be great if you can help me

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organization. How about meeting up for a meal sometime soon? I've made a reservation for us in Quick China

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tuesday

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. It's the best sushi restaurant in the town. You'll love it! And

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we can discuss about party's details. Anyway, let's meet up soon. Best Regards, Merve

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea to improve clarity and organization. Avoid mixing details about the party with other topics within the same paragraph.

task achievement

The response partially addresses the task, mentioning the reason and details for the party, and asking for help. However, specifics of the party organization, such as tasks for the friend, are not clear. Include more clear-cut responsibilities for your friend to improve task completion.

task achievement

Use a more formal greeting and closing for consistency in tone, as the letter fluctuates between informal and semi-formal styles. Maintain a consistent level of formality throughout the letter.

coherence cohesion

Develop a clearer logical structure by grouping related information together and ensuring that your paragraphs flow in a logical order, focusing on the party organization.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

193 words

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