You want to hold a surprise party for a friend who is visiting his home town after a long time from a foreign country. Write a letter to a common friend asking for his help in organizing the party and in your letter: Write the reasons for organizing the party Describe when, where and how you would be organizing the party Ask your friend to meet you in person for further discussions
Hello Dilay,
How is going on? I hope
this
letter finds you well. I have a great suprise
for you! Did you hear that? Our Correct your spelling
surprise
ex roommate
,Emre is visiting London Add a hyphen
ex-roommate
on
Change preposition
apply
this
weekend. We have never
seen each other for 3 years! Rephrase
not
Actually
I have an idea. As you know tomorrow is Emre's birthday and I decided to organize a Add a comma
Actually,
suprise
birthday party on Saturday. That's why I need your help.
I Correct your spelling
surprise
tought
that, we Correct your spelling
thought
taught
can
organize the birthday party at Mc Laren's bar. Wrong verb form
could
Did
you remember? We were escaping from the school and going to drink beer at Mc Laren's bar. Ten years Wrong verb form
Do
past
, Correct your spelling
passed
the
time Correct word choice
and the
flies
.
Because of Wrong verb form
flew
this
memories, I think that Correct determiner usage
these
Mc Laren's
bar is the perfect match! I will invite our close friends from Correct your spelling
McLaren's
highschool
and Emre's girlfriend Ayşe. It'll be great if you can help me Correct your spelling
high school
on
Change preposition
with
this
organization.
How about meeting up for a meal sometime soon? I've made a reservation for us in Quick China on
Change preposition
for
this
tuesday
. It's the best sushi restaurant in the town. You'll love it! And Change the capitalization
Tuesday
also
we can discuss about party's details.
Anyway, let's meet up soon.
Best Regards,
MerveSubmitted by mervekerkuklu on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea to improve clarity and organization. Avoid mixing details about the party with other topics within the same paragraph.
task achievement
The response partially addresses the task, mentioning the reason and details for the party, and asking for help. However, specifics of the party organization, such as tasks for the friend, are not clear. Include more clear-cut responsibilities for your friend to improve task completion.
task achievement
Use a more formal greeting and closing for consistency in tone, as the letter fluctuates between informal and semi-formal styles. Maintain a consistent level of formality throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Develop a clearer logical structure by grouping related information together and ensuring that your paragraphs flow in a logical order, focusing on the party organization.