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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data chart provides the amount of milk produced each year in
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 by four nations in three respective years
of
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1990, 2000, and 2010.
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it is clear that
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 the majority of the countries experienced a rising trend, with
Australia
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 being the only exception.
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, the Netherlands held the dominance during the whole period,
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, Guatemala was the least among all. Looking in detail, the Durch started strong with 11.262.000
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 of dairy manufactured in 1990, which increased to 11.466.000 in 2010. Contrary to
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,
Australia
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 went from an annual production of 11.246.00
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 in 1990 to only 9.165.000 in 2010. In comparison, both the Netherlands and
Australia
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 had similar data at
first,
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the Dutch experienced an increase, whilst
Australia
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 decreased. The remaining two countries are the smallest producers of dairy,
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, both saw a significant leap over a decade. From 1990 to 2010, Tarzania manufactured 87.000, 1.42.000, and 1.55.000
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, respectively. The country that shared the smallest proportion, Guatemala, upsurged nearly four times the original data, from only 26.000 to 84.000.
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