As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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what
language
is used by people nowadays, some of the most popular
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are English, Spanish and Mandarin.
However
, the
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challenges
may occur,
such
as a worry that their native
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language
can lead to
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extinction
,
therefore
some countries try to take
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action towards it. In
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will explain several opinions regarding
this
issue. On the one hand, using
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foreign
language
as a daily
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,
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can be seen as a positive development. Some
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could
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from it, people could get
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the more
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more
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wider
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opportunities
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for jobs and
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broaden
their network.
Moreover
, many company recruitments require to have a good skill in English.
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in
foreign
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language
can be a competitive advantage for a person and increase their chance to get
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a job
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. To illustrate, in Indonesia, to be a government state employee, one requirement that should be
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fulfilled
is
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a TOEFL
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score
more
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than 500.
On the other hand
, some
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countries are
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affraid
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afraid
that
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their native
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language
will slowly
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if their citizens
not
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do not
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use it anymore.
Language
is an identity of a country, aside from the flag, national
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and country's logo.
Thus
,
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is responsible
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for protecting
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it and
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support is essential in
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it.
For instance
, Indonesia has a thousand
of
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local
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languages
which
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now in danger of being lost,
therefore
in
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education
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curriculum
, local
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language
is a compulsory course that should be taught since
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primary school. In conclusion, speaking in other
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language
languages
could give some
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advantages
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in work. I,
therefore
, remain
convienced
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convinced
that
this
trend is a positive with some approach should be taken to protect
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minority languages
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exist.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • linguistic diversity
  • cognitive diversity
  • bilingual education
  • inclusivity
  • globalization
  • localization
  • homogenization
  • revitalize
  • minority group
  • dominant language
  • cultural homogenization
  • heritage preservation
  • multilingualism
  • language extinction
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