As languages such as English, Spanish and Mandarin become more widely spoken, there is a fear that many minority languages may die out. Some countries have taken steps to protect minority languages. What is your view of this practice? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Globalization

impact

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impacts

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apply

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what

language

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is used by people nowadays, some of the most popular

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language

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languages

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are English, Spanish and Mandarin.

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, the

challanges

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challenges

may occur,

such

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as a worry that their native

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languange

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language

can lead to

extintion

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extinction

therefore

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some countries try to take

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apply

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action towards it. In

this

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essay,

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will explain several opinions regarding

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issue. On the one hand, using

foregin

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foreign

language

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as a daily

conversations

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conversation

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apply

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can be seen as a positive development. Some

benefit

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could

be get

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from it, people could get

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the more

a more

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wider

opportunity

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opportunities

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for jobs and

boarden

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broaden

their network.

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, many company recruitments require to have a good skill in English.

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eloquent

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foreign

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a foreign

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language

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can be a competitive advantage for a person and increase their chance to get

job

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a job

the job

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. To illustrate, in Indonesia, to be a government state employee, one requirement that should be

fulfiled

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fulfilled

TOEFL

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a TOEFL

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score

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of more

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than 500.

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, some

country

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countries are

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affraid

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afraid

that

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their native

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languange

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language

will slowly

disappeared

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if their citizens

not

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do not

did not

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use it anymore.

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is an identity of a country, aside from the flag, national

antem

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and country's logo.

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government

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the government

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is responsible

to protect

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for protecting

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it and

society

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society's

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support is essential in

implement

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implementing

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it.

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, Indonesia has a thousand

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local

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languange

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languages

which

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are

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now in danger of being lost,

therefore

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Indonesia

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Indonesia's

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education

curiculum

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curriculum

, local

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languange

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language

is a compulsory course that should be taught since

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apply

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primary school. In conclusion, speaking in other

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languange

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language

languages

could give some

advantage

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advantages

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in work. I,

therefore

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, remain

convienced

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convinced

that

this

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trend is a positive with some approach should be taken to protect

minorty

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minority languages

languange

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exist.

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coherence cohesion

The essay demonstrates an attempt to organize ideas and arguments, although paragraphs are poorly delineated with inadequate use of cohesive devices. This affects the overall clarity and flow of the essay. More varied and appropriate use of linking words and paragraph structuring would significantly benefit the coherence.

task achievement

Task response is median as the essay partly addresses the question, however, the development of ideas is limited and at times, not entirely relevant to the prompt. The conclusion is restated without further summarization or insights into the writer's view. The essay should focus more on addressing all parts of the task with a clear and expanded argument throughout, leading to a more substantive conclusion.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

273 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cultural heritage
linguistic diversity
cognitive diversity
bilingual education
inclusivity
globalization
localization
homogenization
revitalize
minority group
dominant language
cultural homogenization
heritage preservation
multilingualism
language extinction

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