Some people say that now is the best time in histroy to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?
In the modern era, part of
people
says
, Correct subject-verb agreement
say
now
is Correct word choice
that now
great
time in Add an article
a great
history
to be living. In my opinion, these days
people
are living their own life
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lifestyle
style
. As well as
,
I think both Remove the comma
apply
site
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sites
people
are living in my country .
On the one hand, some people
prefer to live until the history
. They are very
interesting Correct article usage
a very
history
. This
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These
people
research about the fast. That will give many experience. For example
, our grandfather, always told our country’s fast people
how was lived?
And our Change the punctuation
.
country
culture. they will like their old cultures, old Change noun form
country's
life
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lifestyle
style
. Because that provided many benefits to our old people
. They connected everything. Everything. Such
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as forest
forest
, fair, Fix the agreement mistake
forests
water
. Correct word choice
and water
Soif
they want anything they Correct your spelling
So
prayed
these. Wrong verb form
pray
every
Capitalize word
Every
events
Change to a singular noun
event
are
very special. And old Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
lived more years also
more healthy.
Correct word choice
and also
On the other hand
, others like to live modern life
, these days
most of the young people
prefer this
. Because technology is going to increasing high level. So most of the part living a standard life
. They do not like old
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the old
life
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lifestyle
style
. Because that
era, poor knowledge Change preposition
of that
people
and technology was not updated. But these Change preposition
of people
days
can use very high level
technology. Add a hyphen
high-level
Such
artificial intelligence. So others like to live without follow
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following
history
. All the facilities available
and updated Add a missing verb
are available
this years
. Change the determiner
this year
these years
Such
medical
, transport, Change preposition
as medical
Correct word choice
and educations
educations
. So students are very Fix the agreement mistake
education
knowledge
.
In conclusion, following past Replace the word
knowledgeable
event
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events
people
are decrease
these Wrong verb form
decreasing
days
. Because changed
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of changed
the
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lifestyles
life
style
, knowledge level
, Fix the agreement mistake
levels
new
facilities are increasing. so Correct word choice
and new
this
generation people
are very Change preposition
of people
interesting
Replace the word
interested
new
lifestyle.Change preposition
in new
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structure
The essay lacks a clear introduction with a precise thesis statement. It's important to have a well-defined introductory paragraph that establishes the topic and your stance, followed by cohesive paragraphs that develop your argument.
coherence
The essay does not consistently maintain coherence. To improve cohesion, use connectors and transition words appropriately, and organize ideas logically with clear topic sentences for each paragraph.
content
Main points are not well supported with relevant examples or explanations. To achieve a higher band, ensure each point is elaborated with specific details that support your opinion convincingly.
task response
Task achievement is minimal as the response does not fully address the prompt, including reasons why now might be the best time to live and alternatives to the current era. It is essential to cover all aspects of the question comprehensively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
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- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
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