The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The line graphs below illustrate the amount of electrical devices owned by families and the number of hours they spent
on
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apply
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cleaning their houses in
unknown
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an unknown
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country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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,
graphs
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the graphs
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show
the
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a
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moderate increase in
usage
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the usage
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of electrical appliances and
steady
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a steady
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decrease
of
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in
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time spent on doing housework throughout 99
years
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.
According to
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the first chart,
refrigators'
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refrigerators'
popularity tended to rise upward between 1920 and 1980 and
then
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maintained the same level for
next
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the next
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39
years
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. The vacuum cleaners experienced the same sharp ascending period for the first 80
years
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and remained at 100% from 2000 to 2019. Despite all three of them
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positive changes in their usage dynamics,
percentage
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the percentage
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of families using washing machines slowly increased from 40% to 70% and
then
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fluctuated between 65% and 70% for the rest of
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years
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the years
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. It is obvious that
amount
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the amount
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of hours spent on cleaning the houses
qucikly
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quickly
dropped from 50 to 20 hours between 1920 and 1960 and
then
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slowly declined by 10% for the rest 59
years
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on the chart.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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