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in the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying to what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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There is a statement that people will not be interested in printed
books
 or newspapers
due to
 easier accessibility of them on the
internet
 which are for free. I mostly agree with
this
 statement, and I have several reasons.
First,
in my
opinion
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 people will be much busier, and they won't be able to spend so much time
on
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going to bookstores or newspaper stations to buy
books
 or papers and they will prefer reading
it
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them
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 online.
Secondly
, the high pace of the
internet
 has increased people`s awareness about the events happening around them. So, it would be nonsense to try to read a newspaper to be updated.
Then
, the cost of
books
 is rising each day, and it is not financially rational to spend so much money on buying
books
while
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 you can read them online for free.
Also
, by reading e-
books
, you won't have a problem finding the book you want, and you have access to all the
books
 in the world without any limit, but you may not be able to find some
books
 in some bookstores.
Last
 but not least, you can read
books
 and news without any distortion from the final editors. In my opinion, the news is more reliable online and there isn't any specific filter on it. Meanwhile, there are some disadvantages I would like to mention. One of them is it will increase people`s daily screen time and it is not good for their sight.
Also
, there are some limitations in some places without any access to the
internet
 connection so you cannot check news
due to
internet
 disconnection.
Overall
, I think the advantages of being able to read newspapers and
books
 online for free
outgrow
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 the disadvantages and it is going to become a future reading trend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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