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The table shows information and prediction regarding the change in the percentage of population aged 65 years and above in three countries.

The table shows information and prediction regarding the change in the percentage of population aged 65 years and above in three countries.
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The table details figures and the probability of the
population
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 aged 65 years and over in
Canada
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,
Germany
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, and the
UK
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that the
population
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 has gradually increased as time passes. Among the three countries,
Germany
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's people is the highest from 1988 to 2030,
while
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 the
UK
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's recorded the lowest. As the data clearly shows, in 1988,
Germany
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's
population
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 showed at 20%, which was the highest figure, followed by
Canada
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(16%), and the
UK
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(14%). By 2000,
Germany
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 and
Canada
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's
population
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 increased at 25%, and 21%, respectively, showing the same growth(5%).
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, the
UK
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's
population
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 slightly rose to 15%, which was the lowest growth among the three countries.
Also
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, the
UK
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 was continuously inclined as well. In regard to 2030, it is evident that the
population
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 in
Canada
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,
Germany
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, and the
UK
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 will rise to 26%, 30%, and 20%, respectively
according to
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 the prediction.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, canada, germany, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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