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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why this might be the case? Do you think this is positive or ngative situation? Write atleast 250 words

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In
few
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a few
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places
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places,
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 certain people think that having a
house
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 for themselves
instead
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 of living temporarily is
major
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a major
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 thing in their life. I believe
its
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it's
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 good to have our own home.
This
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 essay will elucidate the reasons in the next two paragraphs
along with
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 examples and supporting arguments. There are many reasons
as in
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apply
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why humans choose to live in their own
place
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.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 family wants to build a residence
according to
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 their dreams.
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, David an engineer
was
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has been
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 living in
a
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an
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 apartment complex since his childhood,
finally
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 when he had earned enough money, he wanted to construct a
house
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according to
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 his dream. He wanted a
five bedroom
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five-bedroom
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 with attached bathrooms and
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool in his backyard. He planned and
build
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built
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 a roof over his head based on his heart’s desire.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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 we don’t get to rent a
house
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 the way we
wished
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wish
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 to have. Alternatively, when we rent a
place
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, we have to move out of the property when the agreement is over with the owner. And
also
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, when renting a home if the owner of the
house
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 wants the
place
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 back, we should move out immediately and look for another
place
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 to live.
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, my friend Sowmya
was
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has been
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 living in
rental
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a rental
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place
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 since her childhood. The deal with the
house
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 owner was to rent that property for 20 years, but suddenly the landlord asked them to leave the location within 10 days’ time because of the return of the children from abroad.
To sum up
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, having
a
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an
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 own
house
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 is
ones
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one's
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 dream of a
life time
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lifetime
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 than renting a
place
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 and
may be
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maybe
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 a to face a problem in the future.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity by properly organizing essay components such as introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea and a logical progression of thoughts.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction should clearly state the topic and outline your position or approach to the question. It seems somewhat abrupt and could benefit from a more developed opening and clearer thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
Use connection words (consequently, therefore, moreover) to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. This will enhance the reader's ability to follow your argument.
task achievement
Make sure to provide a well-rounded perspective on the issue, indicating both positives and negatives if the task requires it. This essay would benefit from a more balanced discussion before reaching a conclusion.
task achievement
Try to develop your ideas thoroughly. The essay presents examples, but they're not fully developed or connected back to the question effectively. More elaboration and analysis would strengthen your arguments.
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When introducing examples, ensure they are specific and relevant to the main idea being discussed. Relate these examples back to the topic more explicitly to demonstrate their significance.
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