Some people believe that it is good to share as much as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the contemporary epoch, there are umpteen researches in the
field
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of science, business and
academic
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academics
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that
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been published for
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social awareness. Some say that
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approach has numerous advantages
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others believe that some details should be kept in
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secret
. In the following essay, I will discuss both views and share my own opinion. On the one hand, updating society with the latest news about businesses or science is a must in order to encourage them to be more
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knowledgeable
.
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, sharing
ducuments
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documents
and
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information
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about current issues or the latest
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scientific
inventions would not only raise social awareness, but it
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more individuals
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and helps to grow a
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knowledgeable
society.
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, when humankind is struggling with a worldwide disease like Covid,
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sharing findings
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the way to
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it from spreading or curing the patients is a task for each doctor.
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, each company needs a flow of information between its employees to be clear and straight. Businesses thrive depending on the level of their human resources and
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knowledge
.
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, there is critical information that if
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accessible
for
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everyone, could result in catastrophic events. To illustrate an example, just imagine the knowledge of
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of missiles and atomic bombs freely shared in public.
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, society has to deal with an acute situation and those
aquiring
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acquiring
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the knowledge, would be able to make a bomb and
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the world would be completely unsafe to live
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,
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sharing health care knowledge is crucial, the rights of inventors and explorers should
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too. If their discoveries are shared
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, their enthusiasm for
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research
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vanish after a
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.
To conclude
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, sharing information freely is a
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good
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practice as individuals would be more aware of their surroundings and the latest news and scientific inventions and can benefit from them.
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, I ponder that there are some cases that are precious to be widely shared.
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