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The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.

The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.
The diagram illustrates the processes by which
coffee
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 is produced from
beans
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 and sold in markets.
Overall
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, there are eleven stages starting from picking the
coffee
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beans
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 and ending with packing them into jars.
to begin
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 with, the production of
coffee
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 starts by harvesting
beans
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 from trees and drying them under sunny conditions.
Subsequently
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,
beans
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 are roasted and immediately put in a container and made cool. Meanwhile, with the special equipment, the
beans
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 are ground and become
coffee
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 powder before being soaked in hot water .
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, In the next step, hot water is added and
then
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 strain the mixture. As is shown by the diagram, in the following process, the mixture of water and
beans
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 should be frozen again with the previous machine it has grinned.
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, the mixture of
coffee
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beans
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 is dried in a vacuum.
Finally
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,
coffee
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beans
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 are packed in marked jars and delivered for sale in retail supermarkets.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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