The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Day by day the amount of
car
users increasing. In 1888, first
Change the article
the first
car
introduced
to the British market Add a missing verb
was introduced
then
it steadily continue
its increase. When we look at the 2000s there are nearly 29 million vehicles on British roads. Wrong verb form
continued
After
this
excessive usage, some people
opine that another types
of transport should be promoted and governments institute new Replace the adjective
another type
other types
laws
internationally in order to control car
ownership
. Because of the global warming and traffic problems it may cause I definitely agree with this
notion.
First of all, when the number of cars
increased
, the roads become Wrong verb form
increases
stucked
by them.
Correct your spelling
stuck
High
number of Change the article
A high
The high
cars
owned by individuals may cause extraordinary traffic intensity especially while
commuters trying to go or come back from work. In Istanbul, for instance
, there are limited public transports
that’s why Fix the agreement mistake
transport
people
have to use their car
. If your home is not so close to your workplace then
you might spent
at least 2 hours Change the verb form
spend
while
trying to come back to your home from work even if it is 10 minutes away in normal conditions. If Correct word choice
apply
people
encouraged
to use public transport Add a missing verb
are encouraged
instead
of their own vehicles, the roads could become convenient.
Secondly
, excessive amount of car
ownership
contributes global
warming. Recently, the world Change preposition
to global
have
been Change the verb form
has
alarming
Replace the word
alarmed
due to
increase
in world temperature, climate change, Correct article usage
the increase
animal
species ceased to extinct Correct word choice
and animal
which
all caused by global warming. The smoke rising from Correct pronoun usage
apply
cars
and fuel is
the two main detriments caused by Correct subject-verb agreement
are
cars
which affects
the atmosphere in a bad way. Studies Change the verb form
affect
Show
that, in Cuba, where the proportion of Fix capitalization
show
car
users is the least, the quality of weather
is much Correct article usage
the weather
more
better than Change the word
apply
the
metropolitans. Since Change preposition
in the
people
are more obedient with
Change preposition
to
laws
, international laws
might be set in order to limit car
ownership
.
In conclusion, with high
increase in Add an article
a high
the high
car
ownership
, should people
promoted
Change the verb form
promote
with
alternative ways of transport or international Change preposition
apply
laws
to buy a new car
or use
? In my opinion, in order to control traffic intensity and prevent Correct pronoun usage
use it
from
global warming I strongly agree that precautions should be taken.Change preposition
apply
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