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The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.

The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps show the developments which took place in the resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, a comparison
if
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of
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 the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to a mainly urban landscape. In 1990, the town was a much greener recreation
center
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centre
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 with a huge amount of trees and individual houses, but during the next 15 years the town experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees east of the
river
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 were cut down, with all the houses on the south along the future railway line being knocked down and replaced by
factory
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a factory
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.
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, a new industrial estate with
factory
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a factory
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 and pier sprang up on the seashore. Only a few trees on the west of the
river
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 remained. The woodland was cleared to make way for
a
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apply
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houses,
supermarket
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supermarkets
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 and road facilities.
Further
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 developments were the construction of an airport near the
north-east
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northeast
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 corner of
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river
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the river
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 and
new
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a new
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 stretch of railway that
connect
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connects
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 two sides of the
river
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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