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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart and line graph provide information about
last
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year
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's
crime
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 in the United Kingdom. Generally, both
pie
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the pie
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 chart and line graph compared the cause of the
crime
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 committed in
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last
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the last
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year
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.
Firstly
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, the table provides information about the correlation between age and
number
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the number
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 of crimes. The x-axis shows the age range of
criminal
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criminals
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was
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apply
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between 12-60 years old. The group of ages with
most
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the most
a most
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crime
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crimes
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 committed was between 12-28 years old, the
crime
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were
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was
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 mostly committed by a 20 years old criminal with
80
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an 80
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% rate of crimes.
While
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 the criminal with age between 28-60 committed less than 20% rate of
crime
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.
Secondly
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, The pie chart shows the
crime
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 committed
last
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year
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 was dominated by violent
crime
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 with 46%
from
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of
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 the total. The second most committed
crime
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 was property
crime
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 with 23%
and
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apply
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followed
with
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by
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 drug
crime
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 with
slightly
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a slightly
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 lower percentage
with
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of
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 22%. Public order
crime
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 remained
as
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apply
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the rarest
crime
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 committed in the UK
last
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year
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 with just 9%
from
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of
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 the total.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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