Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in oder to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.

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to work or to
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others believe that those former
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and give my personal opinion. To commence with the latter view that
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people
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try to study an international
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travel
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a new accent. To illustrate, most of my friends study English in order to work.
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travel
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the
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learning
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a foreign
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a foreign
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language
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. I think these two
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different
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