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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.
#development #village #ryemouth
The
showed
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maps illustrate the developments, which took place in the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, the comparison of
two
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 maps reveals the change from a
largery
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largely
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 rural area to a mainly urban landscape. In 1995, the town was much greener with a huge amount of trees
in
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 the east side of
an
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the
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 area, but over the period the town experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the trees
in
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on
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 the east side were cut down, with the farmland
that
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knocked down and
make
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makes
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 way
to
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for
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 the tennis.
Moreover
, a new coastal zone estate with
an
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apartments and restaurants sprang up along the road, which crosses from west to east of the town. Near to
hotel
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the hotel
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, which
placed
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is located
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in
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on
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 the south-east side of
an
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the
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 area were built the car parking facilities
nearly
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near
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 to new tennis complex.
Further
 developments were the construction of
housings
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housing
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 along the road, which goes from north to south of
city
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the city
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Residential area
  • Commercial district
  • Public amenities
  • Greenery
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Demolition
  • Construction
  • Accessibility
  • Public transport
  • Urbanization
  • Evolution
  • Gentrification
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