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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps compare a
museum
 in 1998 with
in
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one in
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 2008.
Overall
, it can be seen that permanent
exhibiton
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exhibition
 rooms, cafe, entrance and
garden
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gardens
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 kept their location during the period. In detail,
while
 the
garden
 kept its location at the
center
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centre
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 of the
museum
, fountains and
sitting
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a sitting
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area
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areas
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 were added
in
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to
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 the
garden
. Turning to the cafe, which
were
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was
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 located
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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north of the
garden
 in 1998, kept its position and a WC was built next to the cafe. Another change was the replacement of the temporary exhibition room’s location, which moved from the
south-east
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southeast
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 corner of the
museum
 to the west of the
garden
.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
shop
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the shop
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 was moved to the left of the entrance in 2008, which was situated at the right side of the entrance in the beginning. A room for bags and coats and a restaurant were added
in
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to
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 the
museum
 in 2008. Room for bags and coats was placed at the
south east
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southeast
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 of the
museum
, where
temporary
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the temporary
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 exhibition room
had
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was
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 seen in the first image, and a restaurant
were
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was
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 shown at the north-west corner of the
museum
,
at
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on
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 the second map.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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