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You have seen an advertisement for a community college that needs teachers for night classes. Write a letter to the community college. In your letter: say which advertisement you are answering describe which course(s) you want to teach, and what it/they would be about explain why you would be a suitable teacher

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response to an advertisement published by
community
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a community
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 college in Ontario Daily Newspaper. It came to my notice that college requires teachers to host night classes and I am willing to apply for the position. Actually, I have done my
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 in Food and Nutrition. As you know,
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a bad
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 diet can lead to various problems like obesity, malnutrition etc. So, I am interested
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 students about
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 of
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 diet in order to live a healthy life.
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, I would like to inform learners about the food materials which they can include in their daily diet to
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 weight or vice versa. Unfortunately, I do not have experience in teaching but on the flip side, I have been working in Brantford
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from
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 the
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 two years as a nutritionist.
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, I am delighted to share my knowledge with the students to make their
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 healthy and disease-free. I look forward to hearing from you at the earliest. Please feel free to contact me, if you have any
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 questions or queries. Yours faithfully, Simranpreet Kaur Bhullar
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Include specific reasons, examples, or details to fully develop your response to each bullet point in the task.
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