You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices would help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.
It is argued that to reduce the level of pollution to some extent authorities would invest money in operating public transit and convenience the public to use them by reducing fares. private motors.
This
essay disagrees with that statement because just by doing this
they cannot reduce pollution only by increasing motor vehicle coverage and gas
fare
can do so.
High Fix the agreement mistake
fares
insurance
imposed by companies on commercial transportation would reduce the number of motor vehicles running on the road. To explain , in today's world
it is very difficult for families to bear their expenses only with one income so both partners have to do hard work. To save money for the future Add a comma
world,
instead
of owning private vehicles with high insurance
they would prefer public transport
with this
they not only save their earning but also
save the environment. For example
, it is seen that in Toronto public transport
is very effective and reasonable so people seem comfortable instead
Change preposition
of
Hence
, extra charges through insurance
can save the environment.
Secondly
, by increasing gas
prices we can see positive outcomes. To explain, in public transport
if people get all comfort Add a comma
transport,
with
Change preposition
at
very
low price without any extra price Correct article usage
a very
then
they would prefer it. It is also
seen that with a monthly pass system, it is affordable for people to commute anywhere within the city with low cost. For instance
, in most countries buses run in separate lanes so it's easy for them to be on time. Hence
, gas
prices also
limit the common public to use more private vehicles.
In conclusion, not only by investing in the transport
system government can decrease pollution levels but by imposing high insurance
and increasing the prices of gas
can do so.Submitted by kandanav214 on
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task achievement
The introduction does not effectively paraphrase the question or state a clear position, and the conclusion is not coherent with the arguments provided. Clearer introductory and concluding statements are required.
coherence cohesion
Overall structure is unclear and there is a lack of clear topic sentences and logical paragraphing. The essay should present arguments in a more organized and logical manner.
task achievement
Important content such as clear reasons for your stance and relevant examples are lacking or not developed enough. The arguments need to be more thoroughly explained and supported by specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Sentences should be linked effectively using cohesive devices, but be careful to avoid overuse or incorrect usage of linking words which can lead to a drop in coherence.
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