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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.

The given table illustrates information about world
electricity
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production
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 by using renewable resources from 2009 to 2012. The
electricity
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production
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 was given in Trillion Watt hours (
TWh
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).
Overall
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, the highest supplier was hydraulic
power
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,
while
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 the lowest was solar
power
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. The other noticeable point is, that the
electricity
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 from all five renewable sources depicts an upward trend in the entire span. Moving to the details, in 2009, 3329
TWh
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 of electric
power
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 was generated by using a hydraulic source, after that, it climbed slightly by 3663.4
TWh
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 in 2012.
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, wind and bio-mass
production
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reveal
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nearly the same amount of
electricity
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production
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 over the period given.
However
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, wind
power
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 has generated more
power
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, compared to bio-mass.
On the other hand
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, solar and geothermal were the lowest
electricity
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production
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 sources, compared with the other three renewable resources.
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, in 2009, solar
power
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 and geothermal produced 21
TWh
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 and 67.4
TWh
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 of
electricity
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 respectively. On top of that, in 2012, bio-mass
production
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 was five times higher than geothermal
production
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, which was 326.2 (
TWh
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, twh, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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