the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now ,and plants for its development. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant.

the maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now ,and plants for its development.

summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisions where relevant.
The two maps show the main changes
of
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Islip
town
center
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centre
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currently and in the future. In general, Islip
town
center
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centre
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will become
a
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apply
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much more accessible,
with
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by
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adding
shopping
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a shopping
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center
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centre
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to the bus station and
dual
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a dual
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carriageway. By looking at the
detail
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details
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from maps, the future development of the
town
has more
way
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ways
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of transportation. The shape of the
town
will convert to an oval shape
also
, the countryside will
cut
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down.
Moreover
, they will build more houses and the single road will convert to
dual
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carriageway. A
pedestrians
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pedestrian
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will build. Another change is that the part will be smaller
also
, the bus station and car park construct near the shopping mall
however
the shopping mall will become smaller. In conclusion, by predicting the future development the
town
will become more modern
also
, the transportation will become more comfortable.
On the other hand
, many houses will add and the housing problem will solve. The
town
will have
change
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with
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great detail.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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