Write a letter to a newspaper editor about the poor condition of a historic building in your area. In the letter you should write ● What building are you writing about? ● Describe the current condition of the building. ● What should be done in this situation

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to bring your attention to
poor
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the poor
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condition of
historical
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the historical
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light tower building. The building is
historical
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a historical
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one and witnessed many historical events. There is rich history
is
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apply
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linked with The
light tower
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Light Tower
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. The building is now derelict. There is
plethora
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a plethora
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of wear and tear which has happened in the building
due to
the poor maintenance.
Furthermore
, it has now become
place
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a place
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of anti-social activities and
flocked
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is flocked
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by
pick pocketers
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pickpocketers
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and criminals
in
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at
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night
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the night
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due to
poor lighting arrangements. Stray animals like Dogs are roaming around the city.
Moreover
,the entire site looks like an
abended
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abandoned
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village. The derelict building should be restored on
immediate
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an immediate
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basis. The arachnological department should initiate
construction
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the construction
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process. The light tower should be
patrol
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by police
in
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at
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night. I would suggest police should have
police
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a police
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station there to check
activities
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the activities
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of anti-social elements. Apart from that lighting should be installed. Yours Faithfully, Marsh McLane
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs are well-developed and each contains a single, clear idea. Consolidate related information to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
Include a suitable opening and closing to your letter. The closing did not include a full name, which is expected in formal letters.
task achievement
Clearly state your request and be sure to elaborate on your points sufficiently. Each paragraph should be expanded to fully explore and explain the issues and solutions you're presenting.
task achievement
Use a formal tone that's consistent throughout the letter. Avoid informal language to maintain the professionalism expected in a letter to an editor.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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