The diagram below show information about the production of beer.

The diagram below show information about the production of beer.
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The given diagram illustrates the
process
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which
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involved in the beer making. From the diagram,
it is clear that
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there are 10
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process
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that was
is
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instructed. Started off by milling the malted barley and followed by mashing them with enough amount of water.
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, the mixtures will be separated in the lautering
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in order to give the spent grain
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cows to feed. After that, sugar and hops will be added
in
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the boiling
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then
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and then
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place
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them
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on to
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the whirlpool machine to be processed. Before it should be
fermentate
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fermented
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with yeast,
cooling
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a cooling
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process
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was needed.
Then
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, it moves to the maturing
process
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prior
its
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time to be filtered and put into the packaging in order to sell it.
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