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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The graph chart displays the data about the proportion of the daily use of the
Internet
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 in the UK by different
age
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groups
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 between 2003 and 2006. In general, most of the
age
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groups
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 witnessed an upward trend from 2003 to 2006 in terms of spending time on the
Internet
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.
Moreover
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, the
age
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group
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 of 16-24 experienced the greatest number among the other
age
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groups
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,
while
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 the 65+
age
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group
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 was the least
group
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 in using the
Internet
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.
According to
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 the data, the proportion of the youngest
age
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group
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 was exactly 80% in the first half given period before increasing to 100% and 90% in 2005 and 2006 respectively.
Whereas
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, both of the following
age
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groups
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, 25-44 and 45-54, had a gradual growth from year to year. The percentage of the former
group
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 went up from approximately 50% to exactly 80%,
while
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 the latter
group
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 climbed from exactly 60% to exactly 80%.
On the other hand
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,
the
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Internet
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 penetration in the
age
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group
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 of 55-64 fluctuated from around 30% to about 50% in the 4 years given. Meanwhile, compared to other
age
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groups
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, the eldest
group
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 had the lowest percentage which was under 20% on average.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, age, groups, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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