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The chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the UK , divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes of telephone calls in the UK , divided into three categories, from 1995 to 2002.
The bar chart illustrates the sum of
minutes
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 of phone calls in the UK, among three groups a period from 1995 to 2002. It is measured by billions.
It is clear that
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, in all years local calls were higher than other categories,
while
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 mobile calls accounted for the lowest rate. National and international calls saw a slight increase in a given period. As can be seen from the figure, local calls started from just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 and peaked at 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1999. From 2000 to 2002 local calls experienced a small decrease, at nearly 72
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minutes
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. National and international calls were 36
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minutes
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 in 1995,
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 mobile calls were approximately 4
billion
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minutes
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. It witnessed an increase in the following year, nearly 60
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minutes
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. Looking at more details in
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the graph
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, mobile calls rose between 1995 and 2002. During the period from 1996 to 2000 mobile calls
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 slightly. In 2002, it reached 45
billion
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minutes
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phone
  • long-distance
  • international call
  • local call
  • peak
  • plateau
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • steady
  • dramatically
  • gradually
  • significantly
  • minute
  • usage
  • tariff
  • call charges
  • call volume
  • shift in preferences
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancement
  • speculate
  • projection
  • statistical data
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