Living in the countryside is better than living in the city. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Living in the
countryside
or in the city is a debating
topic as they have their own advantages and disadvantages for the residents. Replace the word
debated
While
majoriy
of Correct your spelling
majority
people
choose to settle down in urban cities, I believe it is better to live in the smaller towns
because they have lower living costs and greater
environment.
Correct article usage
a greater
Fisrtly
, Correct your spelling
Firstly
cost
of living in the rural areas is lower than in the big cities. Correct article usage
the cost
For instance
, people
can save money spending on grocercies
Correct your spelling
groceries
such
as produce since they don't have to pay for its
Correct pronoun usage
apply
long distance
transportation from the farmers to the shops. Add a hyphen
long-distance
Also
, they are fresher and better in quality. Moreover
, housing cost
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costs
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
also
lower, as
Correct word choice
and as
the
result, most of Correct article usage
a
countryside
residents have their own houses, which is barely affordable in the big city. Add an article
the countryside
Therefore
, people
will have less expenses on essentials when they live in the
small Correct article usage
apply
towns
.
Secondly
, good
environment is one of the best things that Add an article
the good
a good
countryside
offers Correct article usage
the countryside
it
citizens. Correct pronoun usage
its
People
can live closer to the
nature and enjoy its beauty every day. Correct article usage
apply
Besise
that, Correct your spelling
Besides
pollutions
Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
such
as air and noise are
less in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
remote places. Correct article usage
apply
Thus
, people
can have fresher air quality which is very beneficial for a healthy life. Take Japan as an example, studies found that majority
of Japanese old Correct article usage
the majority
people
who have longevity are from countryside
towns
. They have
very Verb problem
are
health
as they eat fresh produce and live close to Replace the word
healthy
the
nature. Correct article usage
apply
Thus
, to have healthier
lifestyle, Add an article
a healthier
people
should live in the
small Correct article usage
apply
towns
which have better
environment.
In conclusion, living in the Add an article
a better
countryside
is beneficial for human health since it has better
Correct article usage
a better
enviroment
, Correct your spelling
environment
as well as
affordable living costs. People
can own houses and access to
good quality Change preposition
apply
of
produce at Change preposition
apply
the
lower costs. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, living closer to the
nature allows Correct article usage
apply
people
have
a healthier lifestyle and stay away from Fix the infinitive
to have
pollutions
.Fix the agreement mistake
pollution
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