The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions from 1980 to 2010

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland who visited four different attractions from 1980 to 2010
The graph provides information regarding the number of
travelers
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visiting four distinct tourist sites in Scotland over the
period
from 1980 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the figures for visitors coming to the zoo and castle in Edinburgh witnessed an upward trajectory;
while
the
percentage
of people exploring the aquarium and festival showed a significant
decline
throughout the
period
.
To begin
with, there was a 10% rise in visitors coming to the zoo from around 10% in 1980 to approximately 20% in 2010.
Similarly
, the
percentage
of people who enjoyed the castle increased from around 20% to the highest peak at around 45% in 1995. Despite
this
number being followed by a significant
decline
to just over 30%
at the end
of the
period
, it was still the highest
percentage
in 2010.
On the other hand
, starting from around 30% in 1980, the
percentage
of tourists who enjoyed a festival experienced a slight
decline
to around 25% in 2000.
This
value remained the same and plateaued till the end of the
period
.
While
the number of people going to the aquarium showed a considerable
decline
, after reaching its peak of around 35% in 1985, to just under 10% in 2010.
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