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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. What are the causes of this? Is this a positive or negative development?

The
people
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 in some unnamed countries decided to buy
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home
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homes
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 rather than for renting for every year.
this
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 decision is very
importan
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important
 to
do
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make
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 because the value of
money
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 for renting
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home
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a home
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in
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over
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 many years is similar
with buy
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to buying
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 a
home
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.
Despite
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, many
people
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 still
to
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apply
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do the
way
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 to
rent
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 for living a
while
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 with
the
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apply
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many
reason
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reasons
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. I agree with them
have
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to have
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 a plan in future
have
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to have
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 a
home
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 event for a moment
live
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and live
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 in
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rent
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a rented
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home
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. I believe that every family have a big dream
to get
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of getting
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 a
home
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 where there is no problem
about
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with
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 the payment
in
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on
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 the
last
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 day
in
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of
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 every
years
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year
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. Some
people
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 are faced
to
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with
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hard
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a hard
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way
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 to get comfortable living for their families,
with divide
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by dividing
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 their salary into three
part
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parts
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 namely for daily
needed
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needs
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, education for
childreen
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children
, and
for
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apply
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renting their living.
This
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 condition
push
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pushes
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 some families to make a decision to
choise
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choose
 a
rent
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 than buy a
home
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.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 side. Some
people
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choice
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choose
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 to buy a
home
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with
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by
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 using an opportunity from the bank.
Positive
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The positive
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 impact
from
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of
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this
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 option
are
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is
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 for
people
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does
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who do
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 not have
ability
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the ability
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 to buy a
home
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, it
help
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helps
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 them to defend
them
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themselves
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 self
to stay
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staying
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 for a
while
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 to
looking
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look
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 for a moment to get
permanent
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a permanent
the permanent
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 living room,
in
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On
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other
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the other
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 side, we
uses
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use
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 our
money
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 for
rent
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 every year but we don't have a
home
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 permanently.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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, the price of
rent
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increase
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increases
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 rapidly every year without our
conderation
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cooperation
. So
this
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 is a big problem for them that living nomadent.
Positive
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A positive
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 impact for
people
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 that bought a
home
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was
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as
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 they have a good feeling without
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being uncomfortabel
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uncomfortabel
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uncomfortable
come
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coming
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 from outside, but you must take a
way
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 how to get
house
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the house
a house
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 in early
carier
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career
carrier
. You need more time to save
money
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 before
buy
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buying
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 the house and,
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a thingking
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thingking
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thinking
 strategy to save your
money
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 from waste activity.
Negative
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The negative
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 impact
for
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of
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this
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way
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 is
the
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that
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people
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 lose
thier patien
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their patience
 to
safe
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save
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 their
money
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 and
using
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use
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 their
manivest
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money
 to
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do other
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other thing
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another thing
other things
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.
Sometime
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Sometimes
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 they invest their
money
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to
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in
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organization
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organizations
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unbelievable
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apply
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.

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introduction
Your essay lacks a clear introduction that presents the topic and your thesis statement. It is important to begin with a strong introductory paragraph that sets the stage for the rest of your essay and succinctly presents your argument or stance.
logical structure
The essay's structure needs significant improvement. Each paragraph should contain one main idea supported by relevant details and examples. The use of transition words could also improve the logical flow.
task response
You need to clearly address both parts of the question by discussing the reasons why home ownership might be considered important and by evaluating whether this phenomenon is positive or negative. Your essay should clearly convey your opinion on these matters.
supported main points
The use of specific examples and illustrations is necessary to support your points. These examples should be relevant and clearly linked to your main argument.
coherence cohesion
Sentences and ideas should be connected in a way that allows the reader to follow your argument without difficulty. This is achieved through clear, logical sequencing and the use of cohesive devices such as pronouns, conjunctions, and conjunction phrases.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural norms
  • symbol of success
  • long-term investment
  • financial security
  • asset appreciation
  • personal autonomy
  • modify surroundings
  • social significance
  • tax deductions
  • generational wealth
  • community engagement
  • housing bubble
  • real estate market
  • economic stability
  • mortgage financing
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