In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. What might be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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day and age,

people

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in several nations are finding their way to buy a house rather than feeling satisfied with the rental situation because a

home

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is a great asset in many cultures' mindset

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worth an investment. To my belief, it is an optimistic case, as from which, a strong sense of savings or

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management is formed. In relation to the cause of

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home owning

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emergence,

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rental is seen as a liability, which

people

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end up not benefiting a single penny from at all,

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ownership comes to light as a more promising future. Especially, with a supportive housing policy developed by some governments, citizens only have to pay upfront a certain percentage of the house's value and

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pay the rest in monthly instalments that somehow

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like a rental. Yet in the end, these

people

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can own a house of themselves without extra expenses and less worry about the future leasing cost acceleration. For these reasons,

people

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having the desire to have their lives including finance and

accomodation

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accommodation

in order, are

continously

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continuously

more seen to go for

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ownership. As someone with

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alike

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similar

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mindset, I find

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possitive

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positive

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trend will help

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build up

strong

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enough

money

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management mindset from accumulative savings. It is way better than spending

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wildly or without any

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purposes.

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, the dependable belief of citizens will ultimately be taken

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of by their governments' accommodation policy is

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inappropriate and irresponsible. The reason is they are

ones

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who should care for themselves, plan for their future and where their

money

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goes to as well to be safer than to be relying upon anyone including their authority. In conclusion, the security of having an asset

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as a

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other than the same amount paid out regularly but as a liability

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rental

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the rental

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situation, more and more

people

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are readily set up for the plan of owning one. In my opinion,

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is a good option since it gives

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a great sense of savings and

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planning ahead of time.

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For coherence and cohesion, your essay would benefit from clearer organization. You should use a range of linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments, ensuring smooth transitions between ideas.

task achievement

To improve task achievement, aim to fully address all parts of the prompt. Provide both sides of the argument, even if you agree more with one side. In this case, discussing some potential downsides or considerations regarding homeownership would make for a more balanced essay.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

350 words

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