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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children’s charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the expenditure and the
profit
 money that UAS
children
 from charity in the year, 2016.
Overall
, it can be seen that UAS
children
 can
profit
 the most from donated food.
While
 they spend more money on program services.
More
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over
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apply
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their
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they
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 receive more than they spend. To commence with revenue, donated food
take
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takes
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 the
hiegest
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highest
 sources(86.6).
Then
 the second largest was the community contributions about 10.4%. 2.2
percent
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per cent
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 was from program revenue. Investment income and government had the same amount of
children
's charity
profit
 with 0.2% which
were
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was
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 the smallest number of money. 0.4 per cent from other income. Turning to their expenditure
of
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on
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 program service was considerably highest
accounted
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accounting
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 for 95,8%. 2.6 made by fundraising and 1.6 for
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management
manegment
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management
 and general. As we
noticeable
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notice
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 the the
children
' charity
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profits
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profit
 more than their outlay.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words profit, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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