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The charts below show the percentages of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.

The charts below show the percentages of water used for different purposes in six area of the world.
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The pie charts illustrate the consumed
water
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 percentage for
vary
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 purposes in six
parts
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 of the
world
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.
Overall
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,it is seen that developed
parts
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 of the
world
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 North
America
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 and Europe used
water
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 mainly for industrial
purpose
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purposes
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,but developing
parts
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 of the
world
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 South
America
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,
Africa
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,central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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 used it mostly for agriculture. In detail,developed
parts
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,
such
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 as North
America
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 used
water
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 nearly 50% for industrial aim;Europe used more than half of its
water
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 for industrial per cent as well.After industrial
usage
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,in North
America
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 and Europe
water
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 used for agriculture,39% and 32% respectively.Its domestic
usage
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 in respective
parts
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 was 13% and 15%. In developing
parts
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 of the
world
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,Central
Asia
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 used 88% of its
water
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 for agricultural purposes.In the second place,
Africa
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 consumed 84% of its
water
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 for agriculture; Southeast
Asia
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 used 81% for the same cause.71% of
water
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 is used for the agri sector in South
America
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.In the same part of the
world
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,19% of
water
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 was used for domestic purposes,the highest
usage
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 of its kind.7% domestic use of it in both Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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,and 9% in
Africa
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.12% industrial
usage
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 was recorded in Southeast
Asia
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,10% in South
America
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,7% in
Africa
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 and 9% in Central
Asia
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, parts, world, america, africa, asia, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • sanitation
  • desalination
  • sustainability
  • aquaculture
  • hygiene
  • desertification
  • potable
  • effluent
  • precipitation
  • groundwater
  • drought
  • water-scarce
  • hydroelectric power
  • water footprint
  • evapotranspiration
  • arid
  • water-intensive
  • reclamation
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