The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram displays how instant
noodles
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are produced from flour.
Overall
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, it is a linear
process
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consisting of eight main stages: storaging, mixing, making
dough
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sheets, making
dough
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strips, making
noodles
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discs, cooking and drying, adding additional ingredients, and packaging.
The first step is
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putting the whole flour into a storage silos. After the
storaging
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staging
process
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,
then
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the flour is brought to the mixing
machine
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and
adds
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added
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with
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to
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water and oil until it becomes
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dough
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a dough
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.
Next,
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the
dough
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is rolled by
rollers
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a rollers
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machine
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before
turns
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turning
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into
dough
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sheets.
Moreover
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, the
dough
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sheets go
to
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through
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the cutting
process
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so that they become
dough
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strips. The
process
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continues into noodle
forming
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noodle-forming
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machine
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. Merely after the
dough
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is formed into
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noodles
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noodle
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discs by the
machine
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, the cooking
process
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is begun
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begins
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. The
noodles
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discs
cook
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cooked
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with oil using
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a deep
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deep fried
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deep-fried
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machine
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and dry so that the perfect
noodles
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are
finally
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formed.
Furthermore
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, the packaging
process
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starts with
noodles
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are
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being
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placed into cups and added with seasonings
such
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as vegetables and spices. Eventually, the
process
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ended with
labelling
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a labelling
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and sealing
process
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in which the cups are given company labels and sealed before the
noodles
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are ready to be sold.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles, process, dough, machine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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