In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. What are the causes of this? Is this a positive or negative development?
The importance of owning a home rather than renting
apartment
which was always Add an article
an apartment
debateble
many people Verb problem
been debated
claiming
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claim
that
is
is beneficial Correct your spelling
it
while
others reject this
. I believe that it is postive
development by owning Correct your spelling
positive
home
. I Add an article
a home
accord
Verb problem
agree
to
the formal notion of discord.
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with
the
, Property is Correct article usage
apply
indespensible
for Correct your spelling
indispensable
people's
Change noun form
people
for purchased
lands and Change preposition
to purchase
building
Wrong verb form
build
homes
which causes humans have
stress Verb problem
to be
free
Correct word choice
apply
while
owning home
and making Add an article
a home
wealths
Change the wording
wealth
signs of wealth
buy
lands which helps to increase their portfolio in the future. Wrong verb form
buying
Further
, landowners focus on their career
as well and spend time with family members Fix the agreement mistake
careers
also
easily managed
their expanses and Wrong verb form
manage
no
tension for monthly Add a missing verb
have no
mortgage
. The economy Fix the agreement mistake
mortgages
was
grow no longer poverty will Verb problem
will
have
because by Unnecessary verb
apply
this
people make
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will be
employment
by Replace the word
employed
constructed
houses we need Wrong verb form
constructing
arthitect
, building materials, furniture, carpainter, Correct your spelling
architecture
electrition
which is all get work and earn Correct word choice
and electrition
money
which will helps
to Change the verb form
help
money
flows
in Correct subject-verb agreement
flow
economy
and the country will be develop.
There are some negative Correct article usage
the economy
development
who Fix the agreement mistake
developments
is
working or studying under the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
aged
of 30 to 21 between Replace the word
ages
that
ages youngsters Correct determiner usage
those
had
too much Verb problem
spend
money
spent
on liabilities Verb problem
apply
such
as,
cars or Remove the comma
apply
homes
. Moreover
, they get loans from banks for purchasing homes
and cars therefore
, making too much debts traps Add the comma(s)
, therefore
in
the early Change preposition
at
ages
that's the reason Fix the agreement mistake
age
of
they do not capable Change preposition
apply
to earn
Change preposition
of earning
money
sufficient to buying
Wrong verb form
buy
homes
further
they do not able to payback
Correct your spelling
pay back
loan
to banks. So, Fix the agreement mistake
loans
my
perspective Change preposition
from my
youngerster
need to rent Replace the word
younger people
apartment
Add an article
an apartment
while
there
are Correct pronoun usage
they
studies
and working it will Wrong verb form
studying
helps
to maintain Change the verb form
help
easy
life.
Add an article
an easy
To conclude
, Although
it is positive
development who have enough Correct article usage
a positive
money
to purchase property and for economy
of Add an article
the economy
nation
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the nation
but
there few negative Correct word choice
apply
impact
under the Change to a plural noun
impacts
aged
of 30 will be not be denied.Replace the word
age
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