In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is considered very important. What are the causes of this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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The importance of owning a home rather than renting
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indispensable
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for purchased
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lands and
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homes
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stress
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while
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and making
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buy
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lands which helps to increase their portfolio in the future.
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, landowners focus on their
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as well and spend time with family members
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their expanses and
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grow no longer poverty will
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people
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employment
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houses we need
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architecture
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which is all get work and earn
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which will
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to
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and the country will be develop. There are some negative
development
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who
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working or studying under the
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of 30 to 21 between
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ages youngsters
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too much
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cars or
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, they get loans from banks for purchasing
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and cars
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therefore
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, making too much debts traps
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the early
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that's the reason
of
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they do not capable
to earn
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of earning
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money
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sufficient to
buying
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buy
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homes
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they do not able to
payback
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pay back
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loan
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loans
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to banks. So,
my
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perspective
youngerster
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need to rent
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while
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there
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are
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and working it will
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to maintain
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life.
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,
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it is
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development who have enough
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to purchase property and for
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of
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the nation
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but
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there few negative
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under the
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of 30 will be not be denied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural norms
  • symbol of success
  • long-term investment
  • financial security
  • asset appreciation
  • personal autonomy
  • modify surroundings
  • social significance
  • tax deductions
  • generational wealth
  • community engagement
  • housing bubble
  • real estate market
  • economic stability
  • mortgage financing
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