Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To that extent do you agree or disagree.
There are many
thing
that Change to a plural noun
things
students
should learn when they are young, skill and academic knowledge. There is an idea that schools should provide and focus only Use synonyms
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on academic
academic
success, and abandon Change preposition
on academic
skills
, which are cooking, dressing, and woodworking Use synonyms
for example
, development because Linking Words
children
should learn them from their family and friends. From my point of view, I do not agree with Use synonyms
this
statement, and the reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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reason
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reasons
skills
practicing for Use synonyms
students
. For the first Use synonyms
reason
, Use synonyms
students
should spend their rest time at their home Use synonyms
for
doing what Change preposition
apply
thay
want, which can be Correct your spelling
they
hobby
, reviewing Add an article
a hobby
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an interested
interested
subject, or developing unique Replace the word
interesting
skills
. The problem is that Use synonyms
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student
may Fix the agreement mistake
students
do
not interested in some necessary Verb problem
apply
skills
, Use synonyms
therefore
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school
should teach those Fix the agreement mistake
schools
skills
in the schools Use synonyms
in
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for
purpose
of making sure that all Add an article
the purpose
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student
have those Fix the agreement mistake
students
skills
. Use synonyms
For example
, some Linking Words
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student
may not interested in cooking, Fix the agreement mistake
students
then
they do not Linking Words
cooking
when they are at home. If Change the verb form
cook
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school
do not teach them to cook, they will not be able to cook when they are adult.
Another Fix the agreement mistake
schools
reason
is that some families Use synonyms
that
do not have resources to support their Correct pronoun usage
apply
children
, which can be money or time. Use synonyms
Therefore
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children
may not have Use synonyms
opportunity
to learn those Correct article usage
the opportunity
skills
. Use synonyms
For example
, woodworking is Linking Words
the
skill that Correct article usage
a
have
to use Verb problem
requires
tools
and a workshop to study, and requires experts Change preposition
of tools
for teaching
and Change preposition
to teach
controlling
safety. Wrong verb form
control
As a result
, there are very few Linking Words
family
that have members who can do woodworking, and have proper tools. Change to a plural noun
families
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For
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reason
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school
have to provide Fix the agreement mistake
schools
chance
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a chance
the chance
to
their Change preposition
for
student
to practice those Use synonyms
skills
at Use synonyms
school
.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
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school
should not only focus on academic achievementFix the agreement mistake
schools
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
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basic
Change preposition
on basic
skills
that Use synonyms
important
for living for many Add a missing verb
are important
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reason
. Change to a plural noun
reasons
Firstly
, Linking Words
students
should spend their time freely when they are at home, and learn those Use synonyms
skills
at Use synonyms
school
. Use synonyms
Secondly
, some families cannot train their Linking Words
child
, Fix the agreement mistake
children
therefore
developing the Linking Words
skills
should not rely on Use synonyms
children
's families and friends. The government should provide Use synonyms
cost
of developing basic Add an article
the cost
a cost
skills
to all Use synonyms
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school
and train teachers to be able to teach Fix the agreement mistake
schools
thair
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their
students
.Use synonyms
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