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some believe studying alone is better and while some others believe group study is far good. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#believe #group #study
the more the merrier
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help
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 each other and it is more fun and not frustrating someone is around you get distracted and you can focus on each
study
 that
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 want Nowadays, studying has become a crucial issue for students and parents. Some
people
 are of the opinion that students have to
study
 by themselves
although
 others think they can learn better in groups.
This
 essay will discuss both views and provide my personal opinion. On the one hand, it is argued that we are more efficient when we
study
 in
group
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.
Firstly
, the members of
group
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the group
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 can help
eachother
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each other
 to enrich their understanding. It makes them learn properly and solve easily their problems.
In addition
, the more, the merrier
due to
 the fact that being in a
group
 is not only having more fun but
also
 boosting their spirit.
For example
, most
people
 can spend more chunks of their time
to
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study
 when they are around their peers ,compared with others who
study
 on their own.
As a result
, it can be somehow plausible to
study
 with your friends. On the one hand, it is believed among
people
 that
student
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 have to
study
 by themselves. To start with, if someone is around us, we might
be
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get distracted, because they would make some noise and so on. thereby, making us lose our
focused
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.
Moreover
, when we
study
 alone, we can
study
about
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each subject that we want, but if we were in a
group
,the members of
people
 likely have different opinions.
for instance
, someone
want
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 to learn physics and
he
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can
focused
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focus
be focused
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 on
this
 subject, but if he
was
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 in a
group
 and others desperately want to learn chemistry , he
would
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 learn chemistry apart from physics.
Therefore
, it can be certainly said that it is not only beneficial but
also
 necessary. All things considered, I believe,
although
,
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 studying in groups has some plus points
such
 as having more fun and
reaching
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 some help from your peers, there are essentially important
reason
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reasons
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 for studying
by
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on
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 our own
such
 as choosing a subject which we need and concentrating better.
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