The Graph Above Shows Information About Employment Rates Across 6 Countries in 1995 and 2005

The bar graphs illustrate the percentage changes in employment in six different nations among

both

males

and

females

in one decade from 1995 to 2005.

Overall

,

Iceland

headed the list for

males

in

both

years

while

Switzerland

for

females

. The occupation rates increased for

both

males

and

females

in 2005. In 1995, the employment

rate

in

Iceland

for

males

was around 70% and in

Switzerland

for

females

nearly 55%

both

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whereas

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UK

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,

Australia

, New

Zealand

and the

USA

vary between 55% to 66% for

males

.

Likewise

, for

femalesthe

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females the

females

Australia

and New

Zealand

had almost the same

rate

around 25%,

while

50% and 45% in

UK

and

USA

respectively. In the year 2005,

Iceland

reached more than 80% employment

rate

followed by

Switzerland

and

Australia

with almost 80% and 70% respectively for

male

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.

Further

, the

UK

, New

Zealand

and the

USA

remain the

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same

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70%.

Although

, for

females

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Switzerland

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rate

increased by almost 10% and reached nearly 75%.

However

, in the

UK

and the

USA

it was approximately 60%

whereas

it was nearly 50%, 40% and 38% in

Iceland

, New

Zealand

and

Australia

respectively.