Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attendtion to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some individuals believe that advertising is quite successful by
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attracting
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for
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buing
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buying
goods, other humans say that advertising
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has been
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really prevalent for
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a long
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time but it is no longer below us
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mind
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.
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adverts are great ways to persuad us because they work on some
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to get in
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,
however
in my opinion in the present time the effect of
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advertisement
advertising
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not
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for
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future
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all their
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strategy
strategies
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hand , advertising
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helps us to get our
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since there are a lot of ways that vendors use them to
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attract
our
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one of them by using celebrity
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endorsement
on top of
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that
targeting is another thing
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useful
to find out customers who close to the shop or store that they make adverts for their products , mostly they have tried
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a lot
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that not easy to get in
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so most
people
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by advertising .
for instance
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was in primary school my father bought me a bicycle because of one of the advert that he saw on TV . the color and music that he used in
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the advert
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maks
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made
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my father
to
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buy
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deciede
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decide
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me
.
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However
however
recently
people
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more aware of them because most of
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are using
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things
on the other hand
. nowadays ,
people
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of that what kind of
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advertising
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is
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reliable to depend on for
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buying
being
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their
things
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of
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consumers are
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of some
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strategy
strategies
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to
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increseing
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increasing
their
selling
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sales
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with out
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without
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carring
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carrying
caring
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advantages
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or
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disadvantages
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,so now selles man are
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trying
to spot
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another
way
which
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is sending vendors to
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the
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mall or
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showroom
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to buy
things
, in my point of view .it is more clear to see
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the
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produst
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product
even if you can touch and more practical to choose a better product .
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