Technological development in earlier times brought more changes to the life of ordinary people then recent technological development have brought? Do you agree or disagree?
The
lives
of general people
have been positively impacted by technological advancement
in the past compared to the present. Technological advancement
was required for the development
of the past society and life of people
. However
, I personally agree with this
viewpoint believing that, the present fast development
of technology
is mostly harming the lives
of people
instead
of benefitting them.
Throughout the 19th century, technological advancement
was introduced and during the 20th and 21st centuries, it brought a great change in the lives
of people
. It is undeniable that technology
has made people
's lives
easier and more comfortable. There were numerous sectors which were influenced by technology
such
as agriculture, education, entertainment, business, transport and medicine. Technology
was required to change the earlier lives
of people
. Agriculture for example
, with the influence of technology
has improved a lot with several new technological equipment like tractor
, Fix the agreement mistake
tractors
pump
for irrigation and so on. Correct subject-verb agreement
pumps
This
advancement
leads to a handsome amount of crop production to meet the needs of the increasing population around the world.
Although
the development
of technology
is still continuing and bringing changes, the changes , however
, are not always positive especially
in the perspective of present society. Add the comma(s)
, especially
People
have started utilizing technology
not only for the advantages of people
but also
for harming them. For example
, at present the young generation is mostly dependent on the internet for their education but most of the time they are engaging in online games or social media. This
type of habit is responsible for ruining some essential skills like creativity, and cognitive ability which are required in their future lives
. Therefore
, they are not able to use technology
effectively results in negative
impact on them.
In conclusion, technological improvement is positive until it is beneficial for humankind and Add an article
a negative
the negative
this
statement was appropriate for the past. As long as people
fail to utilize it at present technological development
, it is harming society and people
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