The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The diagrams compare the variety of
adults
activities of Change noun form
adults'
adult's
day
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the day
doing
in 1958 and in 2008.
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Overall
, both of the Linking Words
diagram
show people spent Change to a plural noun
diagrams
their
most daily hours Correct pronoun usage
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on
working.
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Firstly
, in 1958, the highest time Linking Words
of
people spent was on working with the number of 33%. It Change preposition
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also
increasedLinking Words
9
% Change preposition
by 9
throughout
50 years. Change preposition
over
Moreover
, the second biggest Linking Words
activity
was sleeping which Use synonyms
just
1% under Add a missing verb
was just
Correct article usage
the working's
working's
percentage. It Change noun form
working
was
Verb problem
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also
Linking Words
come
in Wrong verb form
came
the
second place in 2008, but it went down to 25%.
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Next,
the Linking Words
activity
like Use synonyms
hang
out with family and friends was the third rank in 1958 with 19%. Change the verb form
hanging
However
, Linking Words
this
aspect was the smallest percentage in 2008 with roughly 6% as same as the percentage of other Linking Words
activity
in that year.
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Lastly
, the remaining 16% was spent on relaxing at home, travelling to work, and other Linking Words
Use synonyms
activity
in 1958. Fix the agreement mistake
activities
On the other hand
, in 2008, those aspects Linking Words
was
stood at 27%.Unnecessary verb
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