How does Sherriff convey his opinion on war in Journey’s End?

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Playwright R.C.
Sherriff
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conveys his distaste and disgust about
war
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in “Journey’s End” through the story and experiences of his characters and his own experience in the
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World
War
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. The
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was
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performed in 1928, a decade after the
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World
War
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, and the
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was set in 1918, 3 days before the
spring offensive
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Spring Offensive
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, Germany’s
last
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effort
of overtaking
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the
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allies
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.
Sherriff
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served as an Officer of the 9th battalion of the East Surrey Regiment in the
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World
War
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, one time in 1917 he was severely wounded in the infamous battle of Passchendaele, having a
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experience.
Sherriff
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would
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also
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emphasize
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the looming violence of
war
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throughout the
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, with each act ending with a sentence remarking
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on the
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constant sound of shelling and gunshots with stage directions mentioning how “In the quiet can be heard the low rumble of the guns up north.”, “Heavy guns…booming miles away”
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and “Very
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faintly……spatter of rifle fire” Which constantly reminds the reader of the constant
war
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happening during the duration of the
play
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, creating a sense of dread and insecurity. What’s interesting is that throughout the acts,
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of machine guns and rifle fires seemingly get closer, suggesting and symbolizing the nearing Spring Offensive.
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amplifies the tension present during the
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.
Sherriff
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skillfully utilizes the
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as a vehicle to depict the monotonous yet harrowing reality of
war
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. In a pivotal act, a young soldier named Raleigh just returned from a trench raid, what’s noteworthy
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s that one of his commanding officers Osborne, whom he has grown close to, died during the raid, and after his Captain, Dennis
Stanhope
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, insisted he celebrates alongside with his fellow
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, overwhelmed by grief, Raleigh resolutely exclaims, “Good god!” “How can I eat when Osborne is lying out there?” The phrase “Good God” showcased Raleigh’s fragile mental state.
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emotional and sometimes even physical instability is common among
soldiers
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serving in the
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, particularly young, susceptible recruits who were enticed by propaganda would go on to haunt the
soldiers
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for years even after the end of the
war
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condition is known as post-traumatic stress disorder, more commonly recognized as PTSD or shell shock.
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would experience incessant explosions and shelling from the enemy which would often traumatize young
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, depleting their mental and physical capabilities.
Sherriff
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effectively captures the coping mechanisms employed by
soldiers
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to navigate the overwhelming stress of
war
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through the character of
Stanhope
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. Throughout the
play
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,
Stanhope
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relies heavily on alcohol as a means of escape, with the character Osborne remarking how
Stanhope
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would drink “Till his nerves are battered to bits” before entering the front lines, the word “battered” projects an image of a completely drunk and defeated soldier, who wouldn’t have cared if he died in battle, which was what
Stanhope
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was presumably trying to achieve.
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would cause
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to eventually succumb to alcoholism. He openly admitted that he can’t go into the front lines “without being doped up with whiskey” a powerful choice of words as it is seen as an attempt made by
Stanhope
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to numb himself from the unceasing violence caused by
war
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.
Soldiers
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would often drown themselves in alcohol to give them “Dutch courage” a term believed to have originated from
soldiers
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’ reliance on Dutch gin to prepare for the horrors of
war
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.
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showcased how
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mentally affected
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and how some of them would rather be completely unconscious when in battle
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than
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them with full mental control.
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