The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.

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The pie chart depicts the results of a survey of eight common leisure activities in the United States of America between 1999 and 2009.

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, it is explicitly observed that the

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enjoyed walking the most.

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, it is evident that people enjoy outdoor activities more than indoor activities. It is crystal clear that the most popular leisure activity in 1999 and 2009 was walking, which was around 29% and 31%, respectively,

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soccer was the second most popular activity in the year 1999, which showed a figure of 17% and later on a slight increase of 18% by 2009. Between 1999 and 2009, the popularity of swimming increased from 9% to 18%,

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there was a decline in demand between 1999 and 2009, from around 13% to 4%. Regarding jogging, bicycling, and yoga, in 2009, fewer Americans enjoyed these sports than 10 years earlier.The most significant decrease was seen in the figure

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aerobics, at 13% in 1999, as opposed to merely 4% in 2009,

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the popularity of bicycling was 7%, respectively.

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The following pie charts show the results of a survey into the most popular leisure activities in the United States of America in 1999 and 2009.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Do we have to plan for future or stay focused on our present what is your opinion and why ? provide example to support your stand.