Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, it is crucial to learn a foreign
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its worldwide spread and numerous
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, everybody needs to learn a second
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their mother tongue, some people say if children learn a new
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in a primary
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action is better for them, others believe that students should learn a
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in collage or secondary academy. In my opinion, learning a new
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in a primary academy is better than in a secondary institute. On the one hand, the majority of parents believe that
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condition has several positive aspects
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as learning a fresh
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deeply since it is psychological proof that kids' brains are adapted to learn as many as languages before ten years old easily.
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, it gives rise to understanding the new tongue deeply in comparison with teens.
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, as proven by the latest statistics in Canada, over seventy
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of those under ten years old can grasp grammar without any problem.
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, they can easily communicate with their classmates.
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, learning a new
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can
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new
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like when they grow up, they can business deals in
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market.
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, they can knowledge about their culture and
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,
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should not make
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that you have to
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learn
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language
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. Because
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it will not work for everybody. It is not necessary to learn
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language
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, If
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want to teach other
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languages
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then
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any
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them in secondary
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beacuse
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about their
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, they know about the world and learn a new
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. In conclusion, in my
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children should learn a new
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when they
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learning
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phase because
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they get more knowledge deeply and learn easily
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small age. So, advantages more than disadvantages
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primary
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a foreign
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