Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an aparment?

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In the modern era,
people
are busy in their lives. Most
of
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the
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people
prefer houses
than
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apartments to
living
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a wonderful lifestyle. Both of them have advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
,
people
living in a
house
have a lot of space to
accomdate
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accommodate
and it will
helps
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to
enchance
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enhance
the relationship between the family members. Family members can enjoy functions like
birthday
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birthdays
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,
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and anniversary
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anniversary
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.
Moreover
,
people
can
built
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their
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own house
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house
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houses
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depends
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upon
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their own wishes. They can
modified
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the outer area for the children.
Therefore
, kids can enjoy their own freedom.
However
, the
manitence
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maintenance
of the
house
is a big issue for the
people
who are living in houses.
Secondly
,
people
who are living in flats they can
impreve
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improve
their
life stle
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lifestyle
. They can access the facilities like gym,
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and
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swimmming
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swimming
pool.
in addition
, the
maintenace
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maintenance
charege
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charge
is low.
However
,
people
who live in apartments have no family space. It will affect the development of the family
especially
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the child. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, both
apartment
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apartments
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and flats have
advantage
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advantages
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and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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.
People
live
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who live
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in
house
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the house
a house
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can enjoy more
happy
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happier
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life than the
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people
peole
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people
live
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who live
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in
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apartment
apartments
apaertment
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an apaertment
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task achievement
Ensure that you address all parts of the task adequately. In your essay, you did not adequately compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in a house and an apartment, nor did you clearly state if one has more advantages than the other, as the question prompt requests.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay in a way that makes the progression of ideas clear and logical. Use linking words effectively to connect ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Include more developed examples to support your arguments. Specific details and examples enhance the clarity of your points.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion should summarise the main points made in the essay and clearly state your final position on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential preferences
  • property ownership
  • private dwelling
  • shared facilities
  • urban vs suburban living
  • customization
  • sustainability
  • appreciation of property value
  • real estate market
  • housing tenure
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