The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart indicates eight categories
which
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families' weekly income was spent in a country in 1968 and 2018. In general, the most significant expenditure in 1968 was on food,
while
in 2018, people mostly spent their money on leisure.
According to
the figure, in 1968 eating was the most important part of the week, resulting in families allocating 35% of their income to buy food. They allocated the same amount of money for housing and buying clothes and shoes which accounted for 10% of the total. The expenditure in other categories was almost the same, each less than 9
percent
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.
However
, the lowest spending was
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fuel and power, which was about 6%. As can be seen, in 2018, people mostly spent their money
on
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their free time, which accounted
around
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22
percent
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.
In
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this
year, families spent about two times more of their income on housing
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to fifty years before by around 20%.
However
,
the
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fuel and power cover a smaller portion of the spending, by only 4
percent
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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