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The table below shows expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.

The table below shows expenditures of four car companies on advertising in the UK in 2002.
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The information given in the table illustrates
cost
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the cost
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 of 4 car
manufactors
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manufacturers
 for advertising in the UK in 2002. The measures are given by millions of
dollars
. The figures for the TV and the press ,
overall
, are highest,
while
 the numbers for cinema and outdoor are less than others. It is
interesting
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an interesting
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 fact that Ranault is a car
comapny
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company
 which
spendmore
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spends more
 money on advertising than Rover, Vauxlux and Cetirizine. One necessary fact is that
,
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 spending amounts on advertising with
press
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the press
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is
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fluctuated between 8 and 45
milion
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million
dollars
 for different companies
while
,
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 the figures for radio
is
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are
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same
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the same
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 at 15 million
dollars
.
Besides
, costs for the TV
is
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start from 45 million
dollars
,
thats
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that's
 why,
this
 is the highest category.
Although
 Rover and Cetirizine never advertise their cars at the cinema, Renault and Rover spend approximately 6 million
dollars
.
On the other hand
, advertising
the
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cars
on
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outdoor
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 is not popular for companies and the figures for their expenditures are between 2 and 7.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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