The chart below shows the results of two surveys, carried out at the beginning and end of the year, asking a restaurant's unhappy customers why they were dissatisfied with their experience.

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The pie chart below illustrates the results of two surveys which asked customers of a restaurant why they were unhappy with their

meal

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meals

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Overall

Linking Words

, at the start of the

year

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year,

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the main reason was

due to

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rude staff but

this

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decreased and was replaced with noise

at the end

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of the year. Another big cause was the food was too expensive and

this

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consisted

Verb problem

occurred

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over the time period. The ambience and quality of the meal were the least

sited

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cited

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reasons. In January more than a quarter of customers complained about the staff giving a figure of 27%. In

November

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this

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statistic halved to 13%. In January, poor menu choices had a statistic of 16, which slightly fell to 13 in

November

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. The expense of the restaurant increased in dissatisfaction in

November

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, the figures respectively being 12 and 15. In

November

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the biggest problem was the noise,

this

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had risen from 9 to 24.

On the other hand

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, the food quality and ambience had decreased over

this

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time period, falling from 7 and 6 to an equal number of 3. Waiting for service remained the same, whilst other contributors grew from 6 to 9.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words november with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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