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The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of three types of visitors to a museum between 1997 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the figure of
visitors
 to three different art exhibitions during 15 years from 1997 and 2012. The three different art places that surveyed the
number
 of customers consist of National Gallery, Victoria and Albert
Museum
, and
Bristish
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British
Museum
.
Overall
,
National
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the National
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 Gallery and British
Muesum
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Museum
competed
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have
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 the highest
number
 of
visitors
in
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apply
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several times during the years.
Firstly
,
National
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the National
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 Gallery held the least
number
 of
visitors
 in 2007, at
6million
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6 million
.
However
,
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the Following
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Following
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following
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 year, it showed
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a slight
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slight
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increased
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increase
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 figure
of
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for
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visitors
, beating the
number
 of British
Museum
.
Morever
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Moreover
, its figures gradually increased since 2007 until it recorded the highest
records
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record
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 of all time among
three
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the three
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, which was at
16million
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16 million
.
On the other hand
,
Victoria
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the Victoria
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 Albert
Museum
 was
on
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in
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its
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apply
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first place
of
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in
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 the figures in 2007, showing the highest
number
 of
visitors
 with
13million
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a 13million
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. Its figure remained still in the following year in 2008 but that was the end of its popularity, the
number
 of
visitors
 to Victoria and Albert
Museum
 rapidly dropped and
recored
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recorded
record
 the lowest in both years, 2010 and 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, number, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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